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AVacationwithMyMother
Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusement,allbecauseofmymother---loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaselventellsalotabouther.
MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwewouldeverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe’dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler’schecksMomhadforgotten.
DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept:“Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout(放哨)whileIgo,andI’llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids?”“What?!Oh,Gosh…Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftinastrangecity,butwewerenotabouttotakeanychance.
Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn’twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections(反对).Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.
注意：
1.所续写短文的词数应为左右；
2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
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Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.
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Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.
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1.提炼原文情节
1.Mymother’sforgetfulnessfilledourlifewithmuchsurpriseandamusement.
2.Duringafamilytrip,myfamilyhadtogobacktofetchourpurseandtraveler’schecksasmymotherforgottobringthem.
3.Sheadvisedustoputupatentinastranger’sfamily,becauseshethoughtotherswereasniceasherself.Butmyfatherturneddowntheidea.wefinallyspentanightinahotel.
2.实战解析
首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事(尤其是前文有铺垫妈妈是个forgetful的人，这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带来的趣事)(也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一个点);
其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景：此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，但是第二段不能仅仅只能有景色描述;例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色(同时回忆往事)，最终把故事的落脚点放在“家人的感情”“亲情”“生活的乐趣”“与妈妈一起的趣事”等等角度都可以的;当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题;总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多;
再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重
